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Roan Belouve - Retired  |
I wrote this story and eventually (after my wife had check my grammar) Put it on our website for general consumption. Please check it out and tell me what you think? _______________ *Bro to Vaxxla,Padawan of FiZZandOdan-Wei Part of the mighty Belouve Dynasty-Knight of Nippledom.Twin of Selphestal!**Proud Master to Kaelis and Acura Friend to anyone who would call me the same  . Pic by the amazing Majno (merry) |
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If you want choose one of these, comments would be appreciated as I am writing book two.
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Majno - Padawan 
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Do so bro, tis well written and quite entertaining, for us SW dudes. Way to go Samwise! _______________ " You've just taken your first steps into a larger world. " - Ben. |
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Dash Starlight - Jedi Instructor 
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Wow, that must have been a lot of work! I'll check it out soon as I find time.. will get back to ya _______________ The name is Bond. James Bond. |
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NotSoLittleCaesar - Student 
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Il read it 2morrow il edit this post with my opinion n_n _______________ Quote: I mostly agree oh Lord of the squeezy mop
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Kaelis - On Leave 
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Hey Roan, I liked it alot it was again frsh to have something not about the JA although there is nothing wrong with that its nice to have something else to read about. You built the characters nicely a lot of the time people tend to over compensate a lack of story with character building but i think you got it just about right Can't wait for the next section of it so hurry up and write it  edit: for spelling _______________ Padawan of Roan Belouve, brother to Acura, Proud to be part of the Belouve Dynasty, Proud Owner of Jarhok's 430th comment, Dash Starlights 1600th comment, Saz's 5000th comment and Alex D'Kanas 2100 comment This comment was edited by Kaelis on Oct 06 2006 11:05am. |
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SaZ - Student 
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ill read it this weekend _______________ playing jk3 since 30th of january (2005), member since 1st of february. [Unofficial Master to Vision and Z�diac ] If you can make a fool of yourself infront of 300 people you can do anything - Jaiko D'kana |
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Roan Belouve - Retired 
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Alex Thanks for the feedback. I have to admit I was influenced by the wraiths & x-wing stories, which I liked. Also I was resding Dan brown at the time so decided to use short chapters and to switch scenes regularly. I think it can make the story simple to read and much easier to pick up and put down. Enjoyed playing with the cover art, an idea i got from an old JA member's profile pic, can't recall the name sure she/he was a D'kana. The stories will hopefully lead Roan to the JA not sure if I'll ever get that far very rarley get time to write. Roan _______________ *Bro to Vaxxla,Padawan of FiZZandOdan-Wei Part of the mighty Belouve Dynasty-Knight of Nippledom.Twin of Selphestal!**Proud Master to Kaelis and Acura Friend to anyone who would call me the same . Pic by the amazing Majno (merry)
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Alex Dkana - Staff 
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Hey Roan. Yeah i found this on the belouve website a little while ago now, and i found it an enjoyable read, a well thought out and executed short story. I liked that you managed to flesh out a group of characters well, and that they were not based upon any specific source that i could see, stories about the JA can be good, but it was refreshing to read something so original. The story reminded me in places of the Wraith Squadron star wars books, but it was very original. Can't think of any critisisms of hand, if one occurs to me i'll post here for you. Was half expecting you to enter the story competition that cropped up a while ago, if you get the second story done in time, you should think about entering the next one! _______________ To strive, to seek, to find, and not to yield | Unbowed, Unbent, Unbroken | Rhaiko D'kana - SWTOR EU Guild Co-Founder | Is it what the teacher, teaches? Or what the student learns? A Dkana |
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