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Nebuchadnezar - ex-Student  |
Okay I am writing a book(star wars) It is set just before the phantom menace. I have not included any of the cool story line for different reasons. Focus on the style of writing and please answer the Poll. Here is a preview that takes place at the begining. Star Wars: The guardians “Focus!” said Zester, as their lightsabers whirled about them with great yet elegant speed and precession. Opi and Zester were training with their light sabres in a private drill together. Zester studied Form V a style that concentrated on hand-to-hand combat whilst using the saber as well. Opi on the other hand studied Form III which focused on defense rather than offence. Zester was a twil’ek female of beautiful and elegant race similar to humanoids but with two head-tails that usually ran from the back of their bald head down their back and with better physical flexibility. Twil’ek people also have a variety of full body skin colorations including yellow, blue, red, and a few others. Opi was a Zabrak female. Zabrak look like humans in shape and size but have some small horns on the crown of their bald head with varies black diamond shaped markings and also are a rougher looking species and also slightly bigger in build than those of the twil’ek race. Neither of them were padawan of each other. They just enjoyed working together. The Jedi Council let them do missions together mainly because they made such an excellent team whether on the battle field or in piece keeping to negotiations of treaties. They continued to battle now they where working up the sweat. On their hairless bodies making them grip their lightsabers even tighter. Zester came out with some sublime attacks that Opi could not hope to do. Zester now had her stumbling backwards. Zester then reached into the force and executed a force-push to send Opi flying backwards. To Zester’s horror Opi who was stronger in the force then fore sore that that was about to happen and absorbed the attack then sent Zester flying backwards with one of her own. Zester flew backwards landing on the floor five meters in front of Opi. Opi took this to her advantage and leapt from the floor using the force. Opi was in the air she span her lightsaber 360o above her head and was just about to bring the blade downwards on Zester. When Zester then lifted her bottom half off the ground with the force and grabbed Opi’s head with her legs then twisted around which that brought Zester up in the air and flung Opi on the ground with her lightsaber skidding along the floor to her right side, but also had Zester on top of her with her lightsaber pointed at her throat. “I have won, again,” Zester said triumphantly as she helped Opi up with her hand. “I said before ‘no hand-to-hand combat’!” Opi stated a bit disappointed in herself. “That was a grab. You would have done it if you had thought of it,” she said teasingly. “You know I am not able to twist my body around that far,” said Opi in her own defense. “I know I was just teasing,” replied Zester. “Opi and Zester report to the Council Chambers in 40 minutes,” came over Opi’s and Zester’s comlink from their pouches. “Finally, something to do around here,” exclaimed Opi. “I quit liked some relaxation after the last mission,” said Zester. “You call this relaxation!” Opi exclaimed as she force-pulled the lightsaber back to into her grasp, waving it in front of Zester’s face rolling her eyes. Zester just laughed, partly at Opi and partly congratulating herself on her previous victory. Thank you for reading it. |
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Havvk - Ex-Student 
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Pretty good  _______________ ~~~knows secretly that furious sUx0rs~~~ |Defender of Ulthuan|Master of the deagle|Saber staff king|Master of spam| ~~~ You have to be bad to be be evil but you have to be evil to be bad! ~~~ ~~~ Will always remember c_M@D as a leader and as a brother -_- ~~~ |
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Nebuchadnezar - Ex-Student 
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As for illustrations I will describe the book a lot better this is the basic outline+ |
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Nebuchadnezar - Ex-Student 
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This might sound like a bit insane but... I didn't for copyright reasons. I will tell you that it has Obi Wan Kenobi and Qui Gon Jinn in it. It also has the Kaminonians and lots of nexus(Padmae's arena beast.) Thanx for the encouragement! |
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Nero - Student 
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what we want : nice illustrations _______________ -Nero Quote: Curious, Smartass, what else? This comment was edited by Nero on Aug 22 2003 08:53pm. |
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BD - Ex-Student 
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Like it ... need more coll story lines  ... go for it I would say _______________ -"Do, or do not. There is no try"- |
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