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Vasper Ba'xian - Student  |
Hey all, been workin on my website. Stop by and lemme know what ya think. Any suggestions would be good. Thanks http://www.angelfire.com/realm3/info1/jedi/jedi.html _______________ Brother to: Tamal, Kavar, J.D.,Jermia, Devlin, Ulic, Xiabara, Seij,Tarron Mib,>>>ROCK ON  .My Spacescapes art page.My Everything Else art page. MY FAV. Jedi Are: Qui-Gon Jinn, Corran Horn, and Anakin Solo. Unofficial Master to Tamal. and Kavar. Founder of the Wuji Hundun Jian saber style. Proud owner of Tamal's 200th comment!//Proud owner of Refl3x's 300th comment!>>>Proud owner of Tyrant's 800th comment>>>Proud owner of Lucky's 170th comment>>>Proud owner of BDKawika's 444th comment>>>To except Existance is to except Reality. This post was edited by Vasper Ba'xian on Oct 24 2003 10:29pm. |
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Bail Hope of Belouve - Student 
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Here are the new typo's: "... Jedi Knight recieve": It would be better to change this to: "From here, the Jedi receive instructions..." clone wars: Clone Wars "The mask he wears lets him..." : "The mask he wears allows him to breath in an oxygenated environment. force: Force (more than once!!) A Jedi's reflexs: A Jedi's reflexes Probly: Probably And so on... If you want, I'll look at it again some other time, because I still have to read a book for school  _______________ Visit the Belouve Family Website! Quote: I try to have fun with my friends and try to make a difference as best I can. What does making a difference mean? Well, it can be as simple as saying hello, answering a question that seems obvious or heck, just talking. -- Vladarion
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Bail Hope of Belouve - Student 
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It happens _______________ Visit the Belouve Family Website! Quote: I try to have fun with my friends and try to make a difference as best I can. What does making a difference mean? Well, it can be as simple as saying hello, answering a question that seems obvious or heck, just talking. -- Vladarion
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joca_bt - Student 
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It's cool _______________ - Son to Helen Catherine ;p - Random bash.org quote: X: you know what google earth needs? | Y: More 3D buildings? | X: ion cannon button |
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Vasper Ba'xian - Student 
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LOL wow. didn't realize i had that many typoooooooos _______________ Brother to: Tamal, Kavar, J.D.,Jermia, Devlin, Ulic, Xiabara, Seij,Tarron Mib,>>>ROCK ON .My Spacescapes art page.My Everything Else art page. MY FAV. Jedi Are: Qui-Gon Jinn, Corran Horn, and Anakin Solo. Unofficial Master to Tamal. and Kavar. Founder of the Wuji Hundun Jian saber style. Proud owner of Tamal's 200th comment!//Proud owner of Refl3x's 300th comment!>>>Proud owner of Tyrant's 800th comment>>>Proud owner of Lucky's 170th comment>>>Proud owner of BDKawika's 444th comment>>>To except Existance is to except Reality.
This comment was edited by Vasper Ba'xian on Oct 25 2003 03:21am. |
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Bail Hope of Belouve - Student
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First of all, totally not bad Mind the following typo's: first sentence: Jedi knight has to be Jedi Knight (two capital letters) "sence disturbances in the force for many light years away" --> Force (capital letter) and Light Years is a measure of distance, not of time Probly-->Probably force--Force Padawans don't have to make their own saber they get one at the age of ten Knights usually make their own, as a part of their trials Typo: ,A Jedi -->, a Jedi disign-->design Lightsaber --> lightsaber (no capital letter) jedi-->Jedi thru-->trough Obi-Wan Kenobi typo's: powerul-->powerful younf-->young And you're trained to be a Jedi, not a Knight... So he wasn't ment to be trained as a Jedi (Jinns previous apprentice was named Xanatos) Qui-Gon Jinn Typo's: new-->knew jedi-->Jedi Jedi order-->Jedi Order council-->Council force-->Force Qui-gon--> Qui-Gon Master-->master (no capital A Jedi Master is with capitals, a master like Qui-Gon was to Obi-Wan isn't with a capital letter)Anakin Skywalker Typo's: PODrace (one word) descovered: discovered Qui-gon Jinn -->Qui-Gon Jinn (capitals) council-->Council force--> Force Obi-wan--> Obi-Wan ("as his apprentice" it says, that's not a mistake, but that's not correct either. See, an apprentice is a Padawan for a Sith, if you get my point. But Yoda says: "Your apprentice Skywalker will be" so that's how you probably got confused. That is one of the mistakes in the movies) Obi-wan--> Obi-Wan (Mind the Power of the capital leters, my young Jedi friend) Padme-->Padmè dark side--> Dark Side ..-->... Mace Windu: council-->Council along side-->alongside (one word) Its--> It's he trained--> he had trained Decapitated-->decapitated givin-->given Yoda: For 800 years Yoda trained Jedi. He did not train himself for 800 years. Yoda gave them their initiation: e.g. getting in touch with the Force, and stuff like deflecting bullets (which where the two hardest things to do) After their stage with Yoda, they would receive their own lightsaber typo's: there-->their Qui-gon Jinn --> Qui-Gon jedi--> Jedi padawan-->Padawan force-->Force Darth Maul: Typo's: Amadala: Amidala (several times!) Qui-gon Jinn: Qui-Gon Jinn (several times!!) mastrer: master Obi-wan: Obi-Wan (several times too) Ki-Adi-Mundi: Typo's: Jedi training: Jedi Training (is not necessary, but just looks better that way )council: Council Qui-gon: Qui-Gon Adi Gallia: Typo's: jedi: Jedi (more times than once )Luke Skywalker Typo's: dark side: Dark Side jedi: Jedi purge: Purge Obi wan Kenobi: Obi-Wan Kenobi Uncle and Aunt: uncle and aunt (no capital letters) luke: Luke jedi training: Jedi Training (Luke wasn't a Jedi Knight until he had defeaten Darth Vader, Yoda says so...) leia: Leia (It is not for certain that Darth Sidious and Palpatine are the same people... Remember that Star Wars always has unexpected turns in the story) Darkside: Dark Side force lightning: Force Lightning light side: Light Side thru: threw (Nobody but look attended the burial. Look at the film more closely... All the people are partying because the Empire has been defeated, not because Darth Vader is dead) Count Dooku: Typo's: Jedi order: Jedi Order Qui-gon Jinn: Qui-Gon Jinn Obi-wan Kenobi: Obi-Wan Kenobi (I would leave the part about the force push out..) Obi-wan: Obi-Wan Padme: Padmè Kit Fisto: Typo's: jedi: Jedi clone troops: Clone Troops Voila, that's about everything I could find have any questions? just leave 'em on my profile (It took me half an hour to write this btw) Anyway, I liked the site, I really did Drop me a line when you've corrected okay? Then I'll check again _______________ Visit the Belouve Family Website! Quote: I try to have fun with my friends and try to make a difference as best I can. What does making a difference mean? Well, it can be as simple as saying hello, answering a question that seems obvious or heck, just talking. -- Vladarion
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Jello` - Student 
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Nice website, very informative! _______________ Brady Brothers: Orion-Greg, Furi0us-Peter, Me-Bobby. Long lost cousin to Flash. Midbie Council #007. Ex-JAK. |
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