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This is the first chapter of the book that I'm writing. I know, it sounds dumb but actually, I was bored so I started writing. It is what happens after the escape of the Dark Sider Jaden Korr. Let me know what you think of this chapter, and tell me what you would like to see in this story and I'll try to put it in there. If you'd like to see someone special (e.g. yourself, or a member of the JA in this story, just tell me... And I'll try to fit it in as well) _______________ Visit the Belouve Family Website! Quote: I try to have fun with my friends and try to make a difference as best I can. What does making a difference mean? Well, it can be as simple as saying hello, answering a question that seems obvious or heck, just talking. -- Vladarion
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Chapter 3 Luke became desperate. He knew that he had to do something, and quick. The only thing he could think off was to follow in Kyle’s footsteps, and possibly even walk into the same trap. Near on of the moons of Korriban, was a Control Station that used to belong to the Empire, now merchants control it. Kyle had to have passed there. He would’ve been ordered to say where he was going, so they must know where his ship headed. He knew he had to get there. He warned C3-PO that he would be gone for a short while and hopped into his X-Wing. He then quickly entered hyperspace. Would he find something near Korriban? Would it help him in his search for Kyle? Kyle was, off course, still in his cell, when 3 Disciples and some storm troopers came to interrogate him. They did it the old fashioned way with a couple of interrogation droids. These droids inject some sort of poison which will lower your defenses, and will make you tell the truth. That off course was tested on humans. But never on Jedi. And Kyle was no stranger to these kind of droids. They got nothing from him, I can assure you. When they finally stopped he laid down on his bed. He was thinking about what happened and tried to use the Force to heal his injuries. But his Force Heal technique was inoperable. He couldn’t use it. It was being blocked by something, he could feel it. Something was holding him back. The only answer to this problem was off course meditation. It’s like the English cup of tea: the answer to everything. When he went into meditation, he first looked inside himself, using the Neutral Force, which can be used by all Force Users. He found nothing peculiar. All was still in one piece, no injuries, no broken bones, no nothing. And still, there was something that was holding him back. But it wasn’t to be found in his body, that much was for sure. He then tried to look inside the Force. He could feel a very weak connection to the Light Side, but a very powerful connection to the Dark Side. Somehow, it was even stronger than anything he has ever felt before. He did not know how, but he was connected with the Dark Side again. Since he had no other choice, he looked into the Dark Side, and what he saw was not satisfying. He saw the ghosts of people he had killed a long time ago. Ghosts like Jerec, and even Desann was there. They where laughing at him, and told him that it wouldn’t be long before they would have their revenge on him. He felt that he was leaning over to the Dark Side, so he quickly stopped the meditation. How could it be? He was connected with the Dark Side again. The last time he felt a connection, was when Jan, his girlfriend, was kidnapped by Desann and Tavion. But after he had his revenge and saved her from their claws, the hate inside his heart vanished without a trace. In all those years that have followed, he never felt the Dark Side again in his heart. And now, he has got a strong connection to the Dark Side. What is happening with him? Jaden was now almost near Coruscant. The evil Jaden seemed to have gotten the upper hand at this moment, and when he left hyperspace he quickly entered some coordinates and landed somewhere in a small garden. He exited his ship and went inside the nearby home. A few flashes, a few shots, a few screams and then complete silence. Jaden used his lightsaber on the inhabitants and killed them all without even caring for their life. He then went upstairs into a small room that had blue wallpaper. He used the Force to move the bed, and under the bed there was a box. He took up the box, and in the small box he found a small disc. He put it in his pocket and then his senses went berserk. He felt a nearby danger. A danger even to him. He used Force Sense to sense what was going on, and what he saw was not pleasing. He saw two people running towards the house. He could not explain it, but there was a bright light around them. The one light was bigger than the others light and he knew that they where a very real danger. He closed and locked the door by using the Force. Then he took up his bed, again with the Force, and put it against the door. He put it upwards, so the entire door was blocked. He then took out his lightsaber and went to the other side of the room. He ignited the lightsaber and made a hole in the wall. Through this hole he jumped out. It was not too high and he didn’t take any damage from the fall. His senses where still warning him of danger, and he could see no other choice than to run like hell. And I can tell you, he did ran. He ran like the whips of Ragnos where behind him. In only fifteen minutes, he had ran more than two miles. His senses now stopped and acted normal again. The danger was gone for the moment. Who where those two people? Those where Jedi, off course. Probably a master and his apprentice. Will they follow him? Will they find him? And if they find him, will he be killed? _______________ Visit the Belouve Family Website! Quote: I try to have fun with my friends and try to make a difference as best I can. What does making a difference mean? Well, it can be as simple as saying hello, answering a question that seems obvious or heck, just talking. -- Vladarion
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Sure, under what name? Just Trekked, or...? _______________ Visit the Belouve Family Website! Quote: I try to have fun with my friends and try to make a difference as best I can. What does making a difference mean? Well, it can be as simple as saying hello, answering a question that seems obvious or heck, just talking. -- Vladarion
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oh oh! i would liken to be insa storysa  _______________ he's a Real nowhere man,Sitting in his Nowhere land.making all his Nowhere plans for nobody |
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Bail Hope of Belouve - Student
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Okay, Ace I will read those when I'm not so sleepy as now  I'm so tired I'm falling asleep behind my computer anyway, I'm going to try and read them tomorrow Congrats on being kind of a writer btw _______________ Visit the Belouve Family Website! Quote: I try to have fun with my friends and try to make a difference as best I can. What does making a difference mean? Well, it can be as simple as saying hello, answering a question that seems obvious or heck, just talking. -- Vladarion
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well Bail Hope. I am kinda a writer..and here are some of my stories and poems. http://allpoetry.com/search/search=1/type=Stories/by=AceySpadey _______________ .Lag Bro to Xanatos. Adopted Twin to Bubu. Big-Brother to SmilyKrazy ---- JATSRAD Guru, JASE Member, JA SP Mod Staff ---- The Order of the Stick -- Big thanks to Mango for my avatar -- Quote: Sometimes you've got to specifically go out of your way to get into trouble. It's called fun.
Quote: (Random hella old quote) <Fizz of Belouve> .. in sovjet russia, cereals spit at YOU!
Quote: whats the point of growing up, if your not allowed to act childish!
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I'm not I'm just saying that she is a better writer  _______________ Visit the Belouve Family Website! Quote: I try to have fun with my friends and try to make a difference as best I can. What does making a difference mean? Well, it can be as simple as saying hello, answering a question that seems obvious or heck, just talking. -- Vladarion
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sharwyn - Ex-Student |
na don't put ur self down!!! |
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Thanks Sharwyn But it isn't close to the one of Rei That story is so much better than mine _______________ Visit the Belouve Family Website! Quote: I try to have fun with my friends and try to make a difference as best I can. What does making a difference mean? Well, it can be as simple as saying hello, answering a question that seems obvious or heck, just talking. -- Vladarion
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sharwyn - Ex-Student |
urs pwns too =) |
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Ok, this is chapter two (the prologue is not a real chapter ) Again, feel free to add your comments and hopes of the way the story will turn out Chapter 2 Kyle was in a cell that was closed by red beam-like walls. It seemed like a red force field was used as the bars to keep him in there. His lightsaber was gone, not that it would be of any use in there. He was still wondering how he could have been caught. He has fought more enemies at a time, and he won without a problem in other fights. Why not now? Why did he drop his lightsaber? All of these questions went through his head while he sat there on his bed. He tried to get a connection with the Force, but every time he tried, he felt a rage in his heart. It seemed impossible to get a clear connection. He knew something was wrong, and wrong badly. He saw nothing else to do but meditate there to keep calm. He first started with a breathing technique to calm his movements and to clear his mind of thoughts. Since Kyle had trained in this many times before, it was no problem for him. Though it was impossible to scour the Force for clues of where he was, or where Jaden was. What was happening to him? Luke, in the meantime, at the Academy scoured the Force for clues where Kyle was. But he wasn’t there! He was no where to be found. His presence wasn’t found in the Light Side of the force, nor was it found in the Dark Side of the Force. Where was Kyle? And was he still alive? After Jaden’s meditation session he left the room and went to the hangar bay. There he saw his Z-95 which he immediately boarded. Before he left he sent a message to the crew, that they were not allowed to move the ship from the Magnetic Shadow of the planet. He had no hopes that they would actually listen, so that’s why he added: ‘Or my revenge will come swift and deadly’. He then started the engines of the Z-95 and departed from the Korr. He entered the coordinates for Coruscant, his home planet and blasted off into hyperspace. While the ship was in hyperspace, he had nothing else to do, but sit and wait, and it would be a perfect time for him, he reckoned, to get some well deserved sleep. He quickly fell asleep, but it was not a well sleep. He had a nightmare. And not just a nightmare, but the holy mother of nightmares. He saw Rosh being slain by himself, he saw Tavion cowering before his feet. He felt his lightsaber going into her body. He felt the life slipping out of her. He felt the fear of the afterlife that she was about to enter. He felt her pain. The dream shape shifted, and now he saw Rosh, on his knees. How Jaden helped him up, and then held the handle against his stomach. How he then pressed the activation button of his lightsaber, how the sword went through his body. He heard Rosh’s last gasp. He felt the pain of Rosh, how he fell to the ground and died there, alone, no one to ease his passing. Only the cold pain of death… Jaden wanted to wake up, be he just couldn’t. He couldn’t get any control over his dream. He couldn’t. The dream shape shifted again, and now he was on the Star Destroyer, and he saw everything through the eyes of the Commander he ruthlessly killed. He felt the beam of the scepter go through him. He felt the pain, he felt how everything was dark, even before the commander hit the ground. And then, for the last time, the dream shape shifted. He was a little kid now, sitting around a fire. His father was telling him a story about a great Jedi Knight called Anakin. How he became Darth Vader and killed all the Jedi. How he slaughtered people without caring. How he even killed small boys and girls like they where nothing in his eyes. He saw his fathers eyes crying, as if he remembered something terrible. The father then cursed Darth Vader’s name. Then, finally, he awoke. His body was wet from all of the sweat. His heart was raging, and for the first time in Jaden’s life, he was afraid. Afraid of dying. But suddenly, a cold laugh was heard in his head. It took over his heart, and the moment of sadness was completely gone. All he felt now was a rage. A rage for all the Jedi. The world would have been a better place if there where no Jedi. He was sure of it. They needed to be destroyed, and destroyed as quickly as possible. Some part in him actually wished that Marka Ragnos would reappear and destroy the Jedi. And again, a part in him was sad. And certainly not for the last time… _______________ Visit the Belouve Family Website! Quote: I try to have fun with my friends and try to make a difference as best I can. What does making a difference mean? Well, it can be as simple as saying hello, answering a question that seems obvious or heck, just talking. -- Vladarion
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Yeah, when I reviewed the story, I started rewriting that part It is changed now And about the signs of Ragnos, I think it is better that the Jedi do this Because if he does it, it will ultimately end up with him stopping Ragnos, and that's predictable, right? _______________ Visit the Belouve Family Website! Quote: I try to have fun with my friends and try to make a difference as best I can. What does making a difference mean? Well, it can be as simple as saying hello, answering a question that seems obvious or heck, just talking. -- Vladarion
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Mayb Jaden could go search for signs of Ragnos ? I don't really like Tavion being given a Jedi funeral, cuz I think she doesn't deserve it, she IS evil. |
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Bail Hope of Belouve - Student
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I'm stuck with this story Now I need help Give me some ideas, please _______________ Visit the Belouve Family Website! Quote: I try to have fun with my friends and try to make a difference as best I can. What does making a difference mean? Well, it can be as simple as saying hello, answering a question that seems obvious or heck, just talking. -- Vladarion
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Okay, so does anyone have any ideas for the story? What you MUST see in this story? like your own name? Or an ancient hero?, or anyone?All you need to do is ask by leaving a comment here and I'll try to fit it in _______________ Visit the Belouve Family Website! Quote: I try to have fun with my friends and try to make a difference as best I can. What does making a difference mean? Well, it can be as simple as saying hello, answering a question that seems obvious or heck, just talking. -- Vladarion
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LOL NICE!!! STORIES PWN!! I wanna be a writer!! _______________ RIP MOM 06/29/58-07/31/08 Married to Koyi Donita 4/30/11 |
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Whoa dude , thats big. Ill copy it down so i can read it later. _______________ |
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Smilykrazy - Retired
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Wow everyone writing stories! Ill check this one out when i have more time! I cant wait!! _______________ RIP MOM 06/29/58-07/31/08 Married to Koyi Donita 4/30/11 |
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Here's the second chapter Don't spare on the critiscism. I'd love to hear all kinds of ideas where the story needs to go from here: Chapter 1 Luke sighed. Another Jedi that has chosen the Dark Side of the Force. Another failure on the hands of the Jedi Academy. And suddenly, almost out of nowhere, there was this voice in Luke’s head, it sounded like Anakin’s voice. It did not talk in words that Luke could understand, but the language went right to his heart, he understood what was being said, without understanding the words. It said something about Jaden not being a failure, he just fell to his anger. But there still was time. He could still be rescued, and he certainly was not a failure. The voice seemed to be insulted by Luke since Luke called Jaden a failure. As you may (or may not) know, Anakin is Luke’s father, and Anakin went to the Dark Side himself, but was later rescued by his son. Anakin was the first Jedi to ever come back from Dark to Light. Luke sighed again and look at Tavion’s dead body. Only a couple of years ago, she was a simple girl, Luke imagined. A girl that played on the streets, and dreamed about being a Jedi. A girl that fell in love with boys, chased her friends down the street, and probably a girl that got her heart broken. Luke never knew it, but that’s how Desann, Tavion’s former master, ensnared her. See, she was desperately in love with this boy named Dolf, a boy that was one year older than her, but he wanted nothing to do with her, because she dreamt about being a Jedi, which she would never be. Dolf, off course, broke her heart into a million pieces, and when she was crying on the sidewalk, Desann came walking by. He was an overgrown Kowakian monkey lizard and he was a Sith Lord. (What Kyle referred to as Sith spit). He almost walked right over her, until he knocked her over. He looked at her, and was ready to shout at her, until he read the hatred in her heart, and he knew she would make an excellent Sith, if he trained her. He took her under his care, and nurtured her until she was about 17 years old. That was the age in which she fought Kyle. Tavion now felt a fear in her heart, for which she was ashamed for the rest of her life. Kyle showed mercy and let her run off. After that, Kyle hunted down Desann and killed him. Tavion was never heard of again, until a couple of weeks ago that is. She suddenly reappeared, stronger than ever, and at the head of a mysterious cult named the Disciples of Ragnos. She was ultimately slain in battle by Jaden. Luke took up her body and carried it outside the temple. There he buried her in the ground, but left a tombstone near her sandy grave. On the tombstone it read: Here lies Tavion Died in the battle of Korriban Leader of Disciples of Ragnos Lost in battle against Jaden Korr, Former Jedi-Knight He then oversaw the last Disciples of Ragnos be defeated and captured or killed. He showed them all mercy, and took them to the Jedi Academy, where he taught them to forget their anger, and study the ways of the Force, so they could in time become great Jedi Knights and Masters. Rosh was not forgotten, he may once have been a Dark Force user, but he was redeemed, and came back to the Light Side. That’s why Kyle gave him a Jedi Funeral on Yavin before he left for Korriban. It was the second student that Kyle lost. Luke headed back to the Jedi Academy on Yavin IV, for he had a feeling he was needed there. In one of his meditation sessions, he had a strange vision. It seemed far away, and yet so close. He saw Jaden fighting against an unseen enemy. The vision then shape shifted, and he saw Kyle searching high and low for Jaden. He saw how suddenly, from all sides, disciples appeared around him, captured him and took him away. Kyle didn’t seem to put up much of a fight. He took his lightsaber, he parried some shots to him, but that was it. He dropped his lightsaber on the ground and was taken away. Luke immediately knew why he had that vision, to prevent it from happening. But where was Kyle? And did Luke see the future, or the past? How could Luke reach Kyle in time? The comlink, off course! He ran down to the computer room of the Jedi Academy, and he took up his comlink. ‘Kyle!’ he yelled through the small microphone in his hand. It took some time, and in that time, Luke’s heart raged like a Rancor in heat. ‘Yeah, what’s up?’ sounded the oh so familiar voice through the comlink. Luke never was happier before. Luke calmed himself down using one of the Jedi’s breathing techniques. He then said calmly: ‘Kyle, you’re walking…’ ‘Wait!’ Kyle interrupted. ‘I sense a presence.’ The familiar sound of a lightsaber igniting was heard, and then a few shots. Then, suddenly, complete silence… Where was Kyle? And is he all right? It would be a long time before Luke would hear anything of Kyle again… The Star Destroyer was well in hyperspace when a message came in. The message read: Katarn caught. Been taken to garrison It wasn’t long at all before the Star Destroyer (which was called the Korr, like Jaden ordered it to be) came out of Hyperspace near Yavin. He then ordered the ship to head for the magnetic shadow that could hide an entire Star Destroyer. The ship, as soon as it was in the shadow, turned off all of the engines. Jaden soon separated himself from the rest, and sought out a quiet chamber on the Star Destroyer Korr to meditate. Almost immediately he seemed to have a glimpse of the future. He saw Kyle in pain. He saw Luke dying. He saw an even greater war, and the Jedi were no match for the army. The army! Not just any army, but the army of the Empire. Thousands of Clone Troopers descending on all kinds of planets to fight all that is good and light. Humanity was wiped away, and the Darkness came. But it wasn’t Jaden who was leading this army. It was someone greater than all of these puny people. It seemed like a god. A god with horns. A bell started ringing in Jaden’s head. In the room where he slaughtered Tavion, there was a statue of Ragnos, an ancient Sith Lord. Tavion was trying to revive him. Did it work? Was Ragnos back again? Would he start a war against the Jedi and all that is good and light again? Would he succeed this time? On one side of Jaden there started to grow a fear, while another side of Jaden only started to laugh. ‘I’m not a good person! I have nothing to fear from this war. And this guy will take care of all the work for me.’ A part of Jaden was sorry again. And not for the last time… _______________ Visit the Belouve Family Website! Quote: I try to have fun with my friends and try to make a difference as best I can. What does making a difference mean? Well, it can be as simple as saying hello, answering a question that seems obvious or heck, just talking. -- Vladarion
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Well, Acey I gotta admit you should be a writer, thanks, It's changed into your version _______________ Visit the Belouve Family Website! Quote: I try to have fun with my friends and try to make a difference as best I can. What does making a difference mean? Well, it can be as simple as saying hello, answering a question that seems obvious or heck, just talking. -- Vladarion
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interesting write on the prologue, but a few things you might have to look at are your wordings, spelling and grammer.. ********************************* Jaden didn’t stand down. In fact, he used the sceptre again and shot down the commander. A Jedi may survive such an attack, but it was too much for the body of the commander. He was dead before he hit the ground. The Stormtroopers around Jaden all backed away now, and no one ordered him to do anything. He was now the leader of the Star Destroyer. *********************************** that's what you had. let me give it a try ************************************* Jaden stepped up upon the bridge of the star destroyer as all eyes turned to him. He payed no mind to any except that of the Commander of the ship as he purposely walked forward. Hushed muttering floated up to him from around as he stood infront of the commander. His Saber in one hand and the scepter in the other. quite a fearsome sight. "what is the meaning of this intrusion. who are you?" demanded the Commander with an unfriendly demeaner as he turned to Jaden, arms crossed behind his back. Jaden mearly looked deeply at the man and spoke softly. " step aside or die." "what?? Guards....URK..", but the commanders sentence was left unfinished as he fell to the deck. dead. Jaden stepped up to the Command console and inputted the co-ordinates for Yavin. his only words to the crew. "Remove this garbage from my sight." before the ship sped into hyperspace. *************************** well thats my rendition of it.. _______________ .Lag Bro to Xanatos. Adopted Twin to Bubu. Big-Brother to SmilyKrazy ---- JATSRAD Guru, JASE Member, JA SP Mod Staff ---- The Order of the Stick -- Big thanks to Mango for my avatar -- Quote: Sometimes you've got to specifically go out of your way to get into trouble. It's called fun.
Quote: (Random hella old quote) <Fizz of Belouve> .. in sovjet russia, cereals spit at YOU!
Quote: whats the point of growing up, if your not allowed to act childish!
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Thanks Any comments on the story itself? _______________ Visit the Belouve Family Website! Quote: I try to have fun with my friends and try to make a difference as best I can. What does making a difference mean? Well, it can be as simple as saying hello, answering a question that seems obvious or heck, just talking. -- Vladarion
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Just a note, the ship Jaden flies isn't a modified X-Wing. Its a Z-95 Headhunter, the X-wing's predecessor. _______________ When you are going through Hell, keep going. -Sir Winston Churchill. Those who seek power and control of others, no matter the level, no matter the intentions, should never be given it. |
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‘Let it go!’ cried Kyle Katarn at his former student. He, Jaden Korr, was standing right across him, and he laughed at his face. ‘Let it go?’ he asked mocking Katarn. ‘You don’t know the power of the Dark Side.’ Jaden Korr called for the scepter of Ragnos, and it came to his hand. He then pointed the top at Kyle and a beam came out. It only lasted a brief second, but it was enough to throw Kyle Katarn across the room. Jaden took his lightsaber and through it upwards. It cleaved through a brick pole in the ceiling and a part of the ceiling came tumbling down, and landed right on Katarn, who was buried under the big pile of rocks. Jaden now made a hole in the wall, again using the scepter. He ran through this hole, and disappeared. Shortly after this, Luke Skywalker came walking in. He saw the stones and helped Katarn out of the pile of rocks. ‘What happened?’ he asked. ‘Jaden went to the Dark Side. I couldn’t stop him.’ A look of grief came over Kyle’s face when he said this. He then continued: ‘Maybe I’m not cut out to be teaching at the Jedi Academy.’ Luke looked at him, and he sensed the grief that came over Kyle. Even grief is a path to the Dark Side. ‘Obi-Wan Kenobi and Yoda where both great masters, and even they lost pupils to the Dark Side.’ This seemed to help for Katarn, since the grief lessened in his heart. Luke closed his eyes and used the Force to find Jaden. By using the Force, he was able to look inside the heart of Jaden, and see that there was still good in him after all. ‘I sense there is still good in him,’ said Luke. ‘There is still a chance that he can come back.’ ‘Yeah… well…,’ continued Katarn, ‘he was my student, so I’ll take care of him.’ Kyle walked to the big stone door at the end of the room, and just when he was about to leave, he said: ‘I’ll let you know how all of this turns out.’ ‘May the Force be with you, Kyle,’ Luke said. Kyle did not answer and just left the room. Jaden flew with his Z-95 into the Star Destroyer that was orbiting the planet. Jaden stepped up upon the bridge of the Star Destroyer as all eyes turned to him. He paid no attention to any except to the Commander of the ship as he purposely walked forward. Hushed muttering floated up to him from around as he stood in front of the Commander. His Saber in one hand and the scepter in the other. Quite a fearsome sight. ‘What is the meaning of this?! Who are you?’ demanded the Commander with an unfriendly demeanour as he turned to Jaden, arms crossed behind his back. Jaden merely looked deeply at the man and spoke softly. ‘Step aside, or die.’ ‘What?! Guards… URK…’, The commanders sentence was left unfinished as he fell to the deck, dead. Jaden stepped up to the Command console and inputted the coordinates for Yavin. His only words to the crew where: ‘Remove this garbage from my sight.’ Before the ship sped into hyperspace. As the Star Destroyer entered hyperspace, Jaden couldn’t help but notice that there was something in his heart that was sorry that things had turned out this way. He didn’t understand the feeling… _______________ Visit the Belouve Family Website! Quote: I try to have fun with my friends and try to make a difference as best I can. What does making a difference mean? Well, it can be as simple as saying hello, answering a question that seems obvious or heck, just talking. -- Vladarion
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