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Lucas "Luke" Ammons
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Monteeeeeee - Nugget 
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Excuse me but how dare you come to my profile and speak like that, if you read your comments alot of people dont agree with your opinions / writing, get used to critics they are here for good
as for death dont presume your the only person who has stared death in the face. i find it annoying that you think you are the only person to have this happen and to the fact you think it makes your opinion stronger just suggests you cant write unbaised theories. Only a man can write that a women SHOULD keep a baby after a rape, you didnt take in to account any emotional distress on the victim at all and feel they should suffer trauma for life because you dont believe in something. I dont believe in alot of things like god for example, but i respewct the right that other people do believe in it, i dont push my non god opinion upon people as it isnt my right to do so. If u dont like critics dont write again. And stop trying to get the sympathy vote from me about your death experiences, it wont work with me you have no idea about my life and how its been. i wouldnt burden anyone with it, i look to the future, i dont dwell in the past _______________ If you add me to MSN, tell me who you are 
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Mindrith Pride - Student 
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then why didnt you say that instead of randomly posting a "part" of a story ? makes absolutely no sense what-so-ever to me. _______________ [proud owner of talions 200th, 700th,1111th coment AND 1400th , DJK's 3001th coment! , saz's 400th coment! liso's 800th coment! Kitmitsu Aratan's 1200th comment! Cau's 100th comeent, Alexander's (aka CC) 210th, 888th and 2200th comments! Moriarti's 800th comment , Piccolo's 2000th comment! lirael's 505th comment , Quom Farlance's 120th comment, Alexander's 1800th comment , Eica's 1400th comment , Wicek's 3200th comment lady C's 999th comment, Echuu's 1100th comment, Takaru's 325th and 400th comment, Redeye's 200th comment picc's 3600th comment, Ostith's 50th comment, Elmo's 555th comment] |
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Kenyon - Lord of the Dance 
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Yes, I quoted Buzz because I was replying to him on the reliability of Wikipedia - in a sense, I was agreeing with your professor. Why insult me?  |
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Kenyon - Lord of the Dance 
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What? What'd I do?  |
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dangler04 - Student 
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I'm from Ontario |
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dangler04 - Student 
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Hello Luke Im Dave Pollard. I am from Canada. THanks for the welcome. I hope to see you around |
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Rinzler - Student 
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rofl, you cant, its a scripted scene. _______________ I fite for teh usars!1 |
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Rinzler - Student 
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you didnt answer my question but yes i have played kotor 1 and 2. _______________ I fite for teh usars!1 |
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Rinzler - Student
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um final fantasy  ? _______________ I fite for teh usars!1 |
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Rinzler - Student
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I'm not interested in those plots. _______________ I fite for teh usars!1 |
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Ashyr - Student 
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Hey man. We probably have, but I have a terrible memory. I'm from Nevada. _______________ Top ten reasons to get a better computer...|My fan |
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Rinzler - Student
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instead of having a literal conversation on each other's profiles why dont you contact me on msn, its the same as my email: rawrcore@hotmail.com _______________ I fite for teh usars!1 |
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Rinzler - Student
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lol, very easy, dont include them. Also different cultures develope from different regions of the world and one group of people being seperated from others. Why wouldn't people living on other worlds create their own culture and beliefs?
You choose what you want to write about on your own. No one ever accused stories of being firmly based in reality, most of them arent. Thinking that man will colonize other planets is a leap of faith, guesswork at best. You may also venture guesses that some day there will be no barriers between people, if you're a Christian you should already believe this. The story clearly blends two things you seem to be infatuated with: Space Travel and the U.S. Marines. The story is too far centered on you and your own beliefs or dreams for the future. If you're going to write something beyond the realms of current belief then you have to transcend those yourself or at least allow your world to do so. A world cannot both be floating off in the future and at the same time bound to the present. It's too edgey. It is ok to tie in parallels but what you're writing sounds too much like the war in the middle-east set in the future. Outside of America and possibly even within it, many people do not support your country's war and it is not supposed to be a religious war. Books about Religious war, however you phrase them are extremely dangerous because they give people ideas. If it was me I would steer very far clear of anything of the sort. _______________ I fite for teh usars!1 |
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Kenwan Obiobi - Student |
Lol...are you some kind of seller promoting goods/services...rofl. |
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Rinzler - Student
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Well personally I dont know why you bothered mentioning religions at all. It unneccessarily divides your audience. Your story sounds like a lot of stories out there already too. Star Wars, Starship Troopers and the storyline to the games Halo and Quake 2 and 4 would be examples that come to mind.
Classics of literature and film are ones that bring up completely new concepts. Like Star Wars or Lord of the Rings, even Harry Potter brought a lot of old myths into a really fresh and new universe and subsequently brought reading to a new generation and made J.K.R. one of the richest women in the world. In my opinion if you want to make a good story you should absorb much more literature of all sorts of varieties to get a good idea of what a really good story consists of. Also you need help with your spelling and grammar, of course real writers have editors but this is the sort of thing you shouldn't need an editor for. A lot of fantasy bases itself off fact in some way but your stories, from what I've read seem to basically draw off your own knowledge of U.S. Marines and glorify them in some Space Age environment. I don't think its really that great of a storyline and its way too edgey in places that are topics of hot debate and fierce hatred today. I don't think a publisher would touch anything with some of the concepts you put forward. Maybe try to think up something totally different just to try something new out and try to make it easy to read and follow. Most popular authors started out with very simple stories just to get a feel for how they are layed out and composed. I can't be much real help with your writing because I'm simply not a writer but I would say I'm particularly disinterested in the entire vibe of your writings that I've seen. Sorry. _______________ I fite for teh usars!1 |
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Sin'Kaitos. - Student 
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Thank you Luke _______________ Once Forgotten, Revived Atlast.. |
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Rinzler - Student
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usually a person only specializes in animation OR programming, they're too big to do both well usually.
And no I do not think you can make mods for console games, I'd strongly suggest that you know much much more about games before you try to take such a path and realise that becoming a successful game designer is easily as difficult as becoming a movie star. It isn't something you can just walk out and do. _______________ I fite for teh usars!1 |
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Rinzler - Student
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after I finish College I want to go to University. I'm only doing College to raise my grades.
You also need qualifications to design video games, you might also want to go for a specific role as there are many many people involved in the creation of a game. It is also not an easy industry to get into. _______________ I fite for teh usars!1 |
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Ash - Eats Babies 
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I'm just going to toss this out into the wind here but are you by chance between the ages of 12-16?
You know, just kinda curious. _______________ "We keep odd hours...." ----------------------- They Live, We Sleep |
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Rinzler - Student
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uh yeah i guess _______________ I fite for teh usars!1 |
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Rinzler - Student
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hey I was kind of thinking although I'm not interested in helping you, maybe there are people who are.
Unfortunately I don't think you'll find them at the Jedi Academy, this is kind of a website for the game Jedi Knight 3: Jedi Academy. but a quick google and I found something that really has your name all over it "Elite Skills" I think if you go there and submit your stories, you could get feedback from real writers who do that sort of thing a lot and are interested in it. It would probably be more rewarding than the Academy's forum. _______________ I fite for teh usars!1 This comment was edited by Rinzler on Jan 05 2007 04:26pm. |
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Nightfire - Student 
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Huh? what?  now what was that all about  _______________ -Need a light? My 362:nd post was a joke
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Rinzler - Student
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haha, im not really fussed, i'll leave that to you.
On another note, ever played games or seen the anime by the name of "Zone of Enders" ? I think you might like the theme. _______________ I fite for teh usars!1 This comment was edited by Rinzler on Jan 05 2007 06:54am. |
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Ash - Eats Babies 
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I do believe you already told me that once before.
Kansas eh... ...mmm that's just great. _______________ "We keep odd hours...." ----------------------- They Live, We Sleep |
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Rinzler - Student
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sure, it's Matthew. _______________ I fite for teh usars!1 |
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