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Lucas "Luke" Ammons
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dangler04 - Student 
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Hello Luke Im Dave Pollard. I am from Canada. THanks for the welcome. I hope to see you around |
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Rinzler - Student 
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rofl, you cant, its a scripted scene. _______________ I fite for teh usars!1 |
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Rinzler - Student 
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you didnt answer my question but yes i have played kotor 1 and 2. _______________ I fite for teh usars!1 |
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Rinzler - Student
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um final fantasy  ? _______________ I fite for teh usars!1 |
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Rinzler - Student
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I'm not interested in those plots. _______________ I fite for teh usars!1 |
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Ashyr - Student 
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Hey man. We probably have, but I have a terrible memory. I'm from Nevada. _______________ Top ten reasons to get a better computer...|My fan |
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Rinzler - Student
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instead of having a literal conversation on each other's profiles why dont you contact me on msn, its the same as my email: rawrcore@hotmail.com _______________ I fite for teh usars!1 |
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Rinzler - Student
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lol, very easy, dont include them. Also different cultures develope from different regions of the world and one group of people being seperated from others. Why wouldn't people living on other worlds create their own culture and beliefs?
You choose what you want to write about on your own. No one ever accused stories of being firmly based in reality, most of them arent. Thinking that man will colonize other planets is a leap of faith, guesswork at best. You may also venture guesses that some day there will be no barriers between people, if you're a Christian you should already believe this. The story clearly blends two things you seem to be infatuated with: Space Travel and the U.S. Marines. The story is too far centered on you and your own beliefs or dreams for the future. If you're going to write something beyond the realms of current belief then you have to transcend those yourself or at least allow your world to do so. A world cannot both be floating off in the future and at the same time bound to the present. It's too edgey. It is ok to tie in parallels but what you're writing sounds too much like the war in the middle-east set in the future. Outside of America and possibly even within it, many people do not support your country's war and it is not supposed to be a religious war. Books about Religious war, however you phrase them are extremely dangerous because they give people ideas. If it was me I would steer very far clear of anything of the sort. _______________ I fite for teh usars!1 |
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Kenwan Obiobi - Student |
Lol...are you some kind of seller promoting goods/services...rofl. |
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Rinzler - Student
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Well personally I dont know why you bothered mentioning religions at all. It unneccessarily divides your audience. Your story sounds like a lot of stories out there already too. Star Wars, Starship Troopers and the storyline to the games Halo and Quake 2 and 4 would be examples that come to mind.
Classics of literature and film are ones that bring up completely new concepts. Like Star Wars or Lord of the Rings, even Harry Potter brought a lot of old myths into a really fresh and new universe and subsequently brought reading to a new generation and made J.K.R. one of the richest women in the world. In my opinion if you want to make a good story you should absorb much more literature of all sorts of varieties to get a good idea of what a really good story consists of. Also you need help with your spelling and grammar, of course real writers have editors but this is the sort of thing you shouldn't need an editor for. A lot of fantasy bases itself off fact in some way but your stories, from what I've read seem to basically draw off your own knowledge of U.S. Marines and glorify them in some Space Age environment. I don't think its really that great of a storyline and its way too edgey in places that are topics of hot debate and fierce hatred today. I don't think a publisher would touch anything with some of the concepts you put forward. Maybe try to think up something totally different just to try something new out and try to make it easy to read and follow. Most popular authors started out with very simple stories just to get a feel for how they are layed out and composed. I can't be much real help with your writing because I'm simply not a writer but I would say I'm particularly disinterested in the entire vibe of your writings that I've seen. Sorry. _______________ I fite for teh usars!1 |
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Sin'Kaitos. - Student 
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Thank you Luke _______________ Once Forgotten, Revived Atlast.. |
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Rinzler - Student
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usually a person only specializes in animation OR programming, they're too big to do both well usually.
And no I do not think you can make mods for console games, I'd strongly suggest that you know much much more about games before you try to take such a path and realise that becoming a successful game designer is easily as difficult as becoming a movie star. It isn't something you can just walk out and do. _______________ I fite for teh usars!1 |
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Rinzler - Student
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after I finish College I want to go to University. I'm only doing College to raise my grades.
You also need qualifications to design video games, you might also want to go for a specific role as there are many many people involved in the creation of a game. It is also not an easy industry to get into. _______________ I fite for teh usars!1 |
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Ash - Eats Babies 
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I'm just going to toss this out into the wind here but are you by chance between the ages of 12-16?
You know, just kinda curious. _______________ "We keep odd hours...." ----------------------- They Live, We Sleep |
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Rinzler - Student
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uh yeah i guess _______________ I fite for teh usars!1 |
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Rinzler - Student
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hey I was kind of thinking although I'm not interested in helping you, maybe there are people who are.
Unfortunately I don't think you'll find them at the Jedi Academy, this is kind of a website for the game Jedi Knight 3: Jedi Academy. but a quick google and I found something that really has your name all over it "Elite Skills" I think if you go there and submit your stories, you could get feedback from real writers who do that sort of thing a lot and are interested in it. It would probably be more rewarding than the Academy's forum. _______________ I fite for teh usars!1 This comment was edited by Rinzler on Jan 05 2007 04:26pm. |
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Nightfire - Student 
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Huh? what?  now what was that all about   _______________ -Need a light? My 362:nd post was a joke
LAIHELA |
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Rinzler - Student
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haha, im not really fussed, i'll leave that to you.
On another note, ever played games or seen the anime by the name of "Zone of Enders" ? I think you might like the theme. _______________ I fite for teh usars!1 This comment was edited by Rinzler on Jan 05 2007 06:54am. |
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Ash - Eats Babies 
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I do believe you already told me that once before.
Kansas eh... ...mmm that's just great. _______________ "We keep odd hours...." ----------------------- They Live, We Sleep |
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Rinzler - Student
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sure, it's Matthew. _______________ I fite for teh usars!1 |
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Jade Jedi - Retired 
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Good for you, just remember take it slow. _______________ *CLICKEH->Never risk the Fett Man|*Download my Saber here. Made by master craftsman Pink Floyd_Mintaka + his 2002 & 4000 comment's [Laz's 700th comment][BDKawika's 600th comment] & Owner of a TOWEL award!!|Master: Sared Padawans: Rage-Ball and Dante Eagle.|*Jade Jedi at The Jedi Academy Archives "There's only one Return and it's not of the King it's of the Jedi" Randal Clerks 2 The top 10 reasons why I procrastinate: 1. |
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Rinzler - Student
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haha, i never get angry and im bad at video games so its all ok. _______________ I fite for teh usars!1 |
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Everon - Student - The winner!!! 
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The only ammunition is your "Add your comment" button on Danes profile, your ammunition are your posts and posts are unlimited.
If you want to remove the ammunition then stop posting on his profile, haven't you noticed that he just wants you to stop posting on his profile? Its that simple, no really it is. |
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Everon - Student - The winner!!! 
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Quote: Virtue,
can please delete all of Dane posts on my profile, if they remain on their I'm afraid I'll grow angry and start his fued all over again (which I started the place) I want move on and forget this slug fest Dane and I had, we both are to blame. Thanks, Luke. I can tell you now that, that won't happen. Just let it die and leave Dane alone. Hasn't he deserved Some peace at all? And his comments are quite correct about your current behaviour, many people do not care about some of your work as you seem to force it upon them with spam and so called "Marketing". So can you please stop postingo on Danes profile and I assure you he won't post on yours. -Zeke. |
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Rinzler - Student
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Take Care Luke. _______________ I fite for teh usars!1 |
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